Friday, November 8, 2013

KC3 Rough Draft

As the year goes by, Hawaii is not limited to its population like it was 60 years ago. Hawaii’s population is increasing by the minute. Statistics even show that the population of Hawaii has increased; in the 1950’s, only 480,000 people resided in Hawaii, but as of 2012, an astonishing 1.392 million people now live on the islands of Hawaii. Heading back all the way to the 50’s, foreigners from all over the world migrated to Hawaii, in able to make some money and care for their loves ones. The arrival of the Westerners changed Hawaii forever. 

The planation field industry was big back in the days, foreigners from all over the world migrated to Hawaii in able to work and provide for their loves ones. Their multicultural workers worked long and hard for eight hours in the hot sun in the plantation fields of Hawaii. Although these people worked hard, there were some unfair rules to go along with this job. For example, the plantation workers had unreasonable working hours, only to be paid at minimum wage. Also, their homes that their families stayed at were fairly small. Take a classroom of an example; their homes were only as big as half of a school classroom. There were many unfair advantages that came along with working on the plantation field, but these people were stuck in Hawaii because of economical issues and the cause of them being under a contract. The root of Hawaii’s population to be multicultural was cause of the planation field workers, of course there’s other reasons but it’s to believe that the planation field has introduced Hawaii to the world. 

Hawaii being known as a perfect paradise is far from what the actuality of what this island is to be. Having tourists fly in and out of Hawaii can have its beneficial, but there’s also complications that’s attached to it. People that live and resided in Hawaii have dentations to go too and tasks to fulfill, but with the tourist wondering around our island, those tasks are hard to accomplish. At most occasions, Hawaii has really bad traffic and it can infuriate many people. Hawaii is isolated from the other 49 states; other states have neighboring states while Hawaii has the ocean surrounding itself, indicating that not many people know what is currently happening in Hawaii and what foundation we’ve built to get to where we are now. The people in the mainland are completely oblivious of the reality of Hawaii. Tourists may think that Hawaii is a perfect place to live in, causing them to move here and making Hawaii more crowded than ever. 

There are plentiful militaries in Hawaii, many come and go but nothingness, there are still good amounts of people from the military that are resided in Hawaii. The reasoning for that is, since our state is isolated from the others, its to be known that we should be the most protected ones because other territories and can invade our islands and attacks us. Also, the attack of Pearl Harbor should not repeat again, so we need as much protection as possible. Hawaii is known to have the highest amount of Military families residing on a state.

          To conclude, Hawaii’s population is increasing by the minute for three reasons; the plantation field has brought many different ethnicities into Hawaii, tourists come here for vacation and some decide to stay, and there are many military families station into Hawaii.  Once of an island of 480,000 people is now and island of 1.3 millions plus people. 

3 comments:

  1. It was a great essay but i feel like you should put more of how you feel about the sub topics. Also i think you got off topic of the plantation fields, But you worded out this essay really well and you should extend some of your paragraphs with some fact.

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  2. I think your essay was great but you not only taked about your topic, you did every single subtopic. If you had three paragraps on you subtopic you would have had a great essay.

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  3. AVOID STATING THE OBVIOUS "POPULATION GROWING BY THE MINUTE" "NOT THE SAME SINCE 60 MINUTES AGO." YOU NEED TO MAKE YOUR SUBTOPIC CLEARER BECAUSE WE ARE UNSURE OF THE PURPOSE OF YOUR ESSAY. AND YOU NEED TO DISCUSS ONLY YOUR SUBTOPIC IN THE ENTIRE ESSAY. AS(2)

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